Finally Finished? Maybe?

August 9, 2017 § Leave a comment

I don’t normally revise lyrics much when I write. I am more of a spontaneous writer in that I write what comes to mind and tend to stick with that. If I do revise a lyric, it is usually only a word or two. There is the occasional exception, but even those don’t usually stretch out more than a day or two before I call it finished.

Now, though, I have a song I have been agonizing over, off and on, since I finished the initial draft three weeks ago and posted it here. (The first revision, posted a few days ago, can be found here.) I believe the lyrics to be some of my best (which may or may not be saying much), but I feel an itch to make them great or at least really good.

So, I go back and forth, tweaking a word here, a phrase there, trying to get to the point where I am 100% happy with the song. (Does that ever really happen?) I don’t know if I am there yet, but this version may be as close as I get. Or not. Please let me know what you think, especially as this version compares with the two previously posted.

Music Saved My Soul

The music was my shelter
From angry voices coming down the hall
Found safety in those records
Every they played, I’d heed their call

Black circles spinning ’round
At 45 or 33 and a third
Kept me from losing faith
I found my church in the songs I heard

In my darkness, the music found me
I let those sweet sounds surround me
Lift me up, keep me warm
Those voices sheltered me from every storm
My gospel readings came from every track
Of every record I had in my stack
And though it could never make me whole
I know the music saved my soul

From Sinatra to The Beatles
And every song in-between
I found salvation in every note
The music washed me clean

A cheap hi-fi was my altar
I knelt before that heavenly sound
My bedroom was my church
And that turntable was sacred ground

Baptized in music’s fire
Those records healed as they went ’round and around
I felt the spirit move me
Every time I heard their sound

In my darkness, the music found me
I let those sweet sounds surround me
Lift me up, keep me warm
Those voices sheltered me from every storm
My gospel readings came from every track
Of every record I had in my stack
And though it could never make me whole
I know the music saved my soul

I know the music saved my soul

© 2018 Walt Huntsman. All rights reserved.

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